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Report #1

This report features good details and solid research, with a clear structure. However the writing is too much like a "PR pitch" and less like academic analysis - you overuse quotes, and many of the sections seem to function primarily to promote the channel rather than examine it. The discussion of the key programs does not seem relevant to the industry subject - instead, consider branding in more depth, look at how the channel works within Viacom's structure, and analyze the target audiences more. Proofread more fully, and be sure to italicize the titles of TV programs throughout. Your presentation was poorly structured, with details and ideas that were hard to follow - use notes and an outline to more fully organize your time. --Jason Mittell 23:07, 29 October 2010 (UTC)