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This is a solid report, with good research and details. However, there is too much repetition throughout, and at times, information is presented without enough analysis and context - don't just list items, but integrate them into an account of the significance of the topic. You don't address HBO's unique financial model sufficiently, considering how it's able to succeed without commercials and with high-budget originals. Your presentation needed more structure to manage time and avoid getting bogged down in excessive detail. --[[User:Jason Mittell|Jason Mittell]] 22:58, 30 October 2010 (UTC) | This is a solid report, with good research and details. However, there is too much repetition throughout, and at times, information is presented without enough analysis and context - don't just list items, but integrate them into an account of the significance of the topic. You don't address HBO's unique financial model sufficiently, considering how it's able to succeed without commercials and with high-budget originals. Your presentation needed more structure to manage time and avoid getting bogged down in excessive detail. --[[User:Jason Mittell|Jason Mittell]] 22:58, 30 October 2010 (UTC) | ||
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| + | These reports offer strong descriptions and information about the programs and online strategies. You could deepen your analysis, connecting the specific programs to the industrial strategies more fully, and expand your discussion of the fan participation. There are some typos and problematic phrasing throughout, some of which confuse the points you're trying to make - proofread more carefully for the final revision. Your ''True Blood'' presentation was solid, but the online one was too disorganized and lacking focus, with weak time management and clarity of analysis. --[[User:Jason Mittell|Jason Mittell]] 23:50, 24 November 2010 (UTC) | ||
Latest revision as of 19:50, 24 November 2010
Report #1
This is a solid report, with good research and details. However, there is too much repetition throughout, and at times, information is presented without enough analysis and context - don't just list items, but integrate them into an account of the significance of the topic. You don't address HBO's unique financial model sufficiently, considering how it's able to succeed without commercials and with high-budget originals. Your presentation needed more structure to manage time and avoid getting bogged down in excessive detail. --Jason Mittell 22:58, 30 October 2010 (UTC)
Report #2 & 3
These reports offer strong descriptions and information about the programs and online strategies. You could deepen your analysis, connecting the specific programs to the industrial strategies more fully, and expand your discussion of the fan participation. There are some typos and problematic phrasing throughout, some of which confuse the points you're trying to make - proofread more carefully for the final revision. Your True Blood presentation was solid, but the online one was too disorganized and lacking focus, with weak time management and clarity of analysis. --Jason Mittell 23:50, 24 November 2010 (UTC)