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Report #1
This is a solid report, with good research and details. However, there is too much repetition throughout, and at times, information is presented without enough analysis and context - don't just list items, but integrate them into an account of the significance of the topic. You don't address HBO's unique financial model sufficiently, considering how it's able to succeed without commercials and with high-budget originals. Your presentation needed more structure to manage time and avoid getting bogged down in excessive detail. --Jason Mittell 22:58, 30 October 2010 (UTC)